I know that these three facts, I'm going to talk about, can be really ridiculous and silly. However, I am sure that these three are true. While you're reading, even though this story is a little bit, .please don't laugh at me. For the second time, I'm mentioning you. I’m really serious. Lastly, some people would think that I'm a little bit strange when they see the upper two facts. Whew! Are you laughing? Or do you think those are ridiculous? Please don't do both of those. Could you just read downwards?
To begin with, I'm not an alien. To prove it, I don't have any supernatural power. For example, I can't fly in the air without the motors, I don't have any beam that scares people, and I can't change my appearance by myself just like anyone else. If I were an alien, I'd have one of those supernatural power.
Secondly, I'd be happy if I'm an alien. If I were an alien, I would be popular(This is a possibility if I'm living on Earth as an alien). Plus, I could use a supernatural power to save people(This would make me more popular), and the would lead me to be a hero.(again, I’ll do this to be more popular) In addition, it is a common sense that being a hero is a really fantastic thing.
Lastly, some may think that I’m little strange because they read my story. Alien is not a common thing to talk about. (I don’t think so. However, my roommates think like this) In addition, my friends are always surprised when I told that I wanted to be an alien and a hero. (They think that alien would not be a hero. How curious!)
These were my three interesting facts that I’m really sure about. Do you have some exciting facts like these? Please share! I want to hear yours as well. I’ll conclude my story about my three facts!:0
Hi Hyun:) I enjoyed your writing. It was very interesting and entertaining. There are just a few things I want to mention about your writing, mostly about the organization. Did you notice that your intro is longer than your body paragraphs? Try to balance your paragraphs. Try to illustrate your body paragraphs more so that your writing is more specific and balanced. Also, creating a better intro and conclusion would be very nice. An interesting hook would help a lot. Keep up the good work:)
ReplyDeleteHi Hyun! Your essay was truly interesting and entertaining. I enjoyed a lot reading it. For the comments, I think Jiyoung already mentioned most of them. However, you could perhaps change the color of the text because I had hard times reading it. (T.T) Otherwise, I liked your creativity! :D
ReplyDeleteHi- I agree with the TA's comments. Using different color fonts can fun but try to use colors that we can see easily. In the intro, also please type the word "three" rather than writing 3. It is also a good idea to space your paragraphs and use pictures in the blog.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the tone of your post. Good luck with your writing.
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