Friday, August 10, 2012

Spring

  One boy ties up a frog, fish, and a snake to a rock. A monk, who saw this, tied that boy to a rock as well. He had a deal with a boy that if the three animals are all alive, he will set him free. However, two of the three animals had died already…What lesson could we get from this story? Mmm… he made a mistake. Does this mistake help the boy? In any case, I’ll tell you about my experience that is similar to him. Then, you would find the lesson. 
This is Spring Part1, Part2
   Firstly, when I was third grade, I had lots of fun during the summer vacation. So fun that I forgot I have to do my homework. In addition, as a result, I couldn’t do all of my homework in the last day of the vacation after I enjoyed my vacation. However, I studied as will while I was enjoying my summer vacation, I studied through this camp. I do not play all the time. 
   My second experience was when I over-speeded while I was skiing. And what was the result? I slided through the snow. Plus, when I stood up, there was a red thingy on the snow. There was where my face was. Oh my got! Right below my lips, it was bleeding. After that, I never over-spee. 
   Lastly, this experience was through this camp. It was the third day. (I guess). In any case, I called Kelly on her Korean name. (I forgot E.O.P because the right before class was Math). And what happed? As you know, I got the E.O.P paper. On the first day of E.O.P! Now, I am always careful not to use Korean except HonJung time. 
  These are my experiences which I got the lessons as a boy. What is the lesson? Now, you would know. The lesson is that making mistakes makes a lesson is that making lessons makes you be a better person. For this, I’ll end this story.

2 comments:

  1. I see what you are trying to say. Good examples, good explanation. It would be nicer if you would lengthen it a little bit. Practice writing longer pieces. Instead of providing a completely identical experience, you gave two seemingly unrelated examples and succeeded in connecting that to the bigger picture. Good job with that!

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  2. This is a good essay. In the introduction, you need to say that you are talking about a video "Spring" and then give the summary. The examples you shard are good but remember to put spaces between your paragraphs.

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